Poem: a fortified home

6 inklings - saturday

fortified shut
the knob instead is rusted and bolted and
to feed the shadows only
the windows are blind
the strange bright lights float in shavings
letting it seep into the cracks in the floor
and a brick weighs down false hope
there’s a shackle tied to an ankle
and there are doors but no freedom
breathe.
pressed so tight it can’t
frame
fragile
walls against this
shadows are pressed against walls
– this corridor
this isn’t home

So I basically wrote this above poem and then I inverted it to see what happens to it. Sometimes changing the structure of the poem completely can provide a new insight or a creative way to understanding how form affects a poem and word order constructs the way the reader pieces together the image puzzles you give them. However, here, since it isn’t a properly pieced poem backwards, I allow you to read it from bottom up to see which way you prefer.

When it comes to self-reflection, I think I prefer the top half of the poem inverted and the bottom half as it was. So I would re-edit this poem to read:

this isn’t home
– this corridor
shadows are pressed against walls
walls against this
fragile
frame
pressed so tight it can’t
breathe.
fortified shut
the knob instead is rusted and bolted and
to feed the shadows only
the windows are blind
the strange bright lights float in shavings
letting it seep into the cracks in the floor
and a brick weighs down false hope
there’s a shackle tied to an ankle
and there are doors but no freedom.

And then after that I’d edit it further. But, once again, these poems are constructed impromptu and as scraps and pieces for this blog for me to probably return to later and to keep me writing.

Till next time,

cumuloq ❤

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